Staring in to the silence,
Nerves filled with fumes,
Choking out loud, the thoughts of you..
Struggling to breathe a drop of love…
Being blind to see your tears..
Passing the days with a bleeding heart.
Its not a blame on you…..I swear,
'Coz the one I love, shall never be blamed
Your thoughts changed my mind and soul
The betrayal made these tears flow
Losing my mind.... in drained out brains..
A friend of mine analyze this
While seeing my painful eyes,
As,
Still can't stay away even I try
Coz my heaven's always You
Waking up in the painful nights,
Throwing life in haunting dreams,
Melting nights with fuming thoughts,
Trying to sleep without You,,,,,,,,,
Not to mention what does it mean
Colour my eyes with your inborn verve
Can't I stay without You…..
Can't I live without You,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
18 comments:
icant assess .........bcz...its seems to be beyond my limit...you are talended.......so....carry on.
hi, nice words.............heart felt feeling? I like it.........for whome u r expressing? keep it up....u have capicity to write more n more.u have the potential coz u r a sensitive person..try to b bold enough to face what comes in life......why cant u live without anyone???? live the life..........coz its a prcious gift of god...........be creative n respect Creator i.e GOD.
wow! really nice poem.. the confessions one.. but rather sad.. i love that "tremulous hands" line.. but why don't you try something lighter too? im sure it'll be fun reading it! enjoy!
Hi
good.......
bi\ut its not upto my standard......
so i couldnt understand anything.....
but last two lines i got....
so dont worry and dont do any thing like that.... i will search her out and get her for you... as my "bhabhiji"......ha ha ha ha ha
any way now only am realising that you have this much capability to write... so carry on all the best....
Hi poet,
Dis s realy marvlus 1 after confessions and kai-vala. The pain wihtout gains can be visualised by reading it. Lines Stabbing deeply into the readers heart. giving different thoughts while reading it again. I feel wordless to congratulate. A mind blowing creation. Try to write some. Hey writer, I take this opportunity to wish you a nice future ahead and I would like to mention one more thing that I am planning publish your selected poems if you permit. Thanks.... Thank you man to make me realise the depth of missing pains and "Losing My Mind in drained out Brains". Oh...... Killing one. Please do contanct me in my email, if u would like to get it published through me. It would be a pleasure for me.
hi...so nice...superb...i like vry much..
Wow!! it was soo nice!!!
You'd make a gud poet i believe !!!
Yu totally lost in romance!!!
Gr8 one!!!
keep goin!
We'd like to see more!
Very nice composition...I like it.
Very nice composition!...I like it.
hmmmm it seems oyu ve undergone a heartbreak ..if thats the reason i can feel how your words have automatically cum thru ur soul ..
thez are emotions more den words n dat explains evrythng that u ve experienced..
pathos always makes for good poetry:)
nice lines
Hi Ramesh, that was after a long time.
Great poems you have here. I hope you are aware of this site:
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Hey!! First of all thanks 4 visiting my blog..
U've chosen best theme 4 blog i.e. Love... nice keep it up....
Even i write my own shayaries on dard n love you read at:
http://www.depth-of-heart.blogspot.com.
Even you can read collection at:
http://www.mehfil-e-shayar.blogspot.com/
Niceeee.......
hay..i think the person wrote ths knows bout my story..
gud one..
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